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A detailed guide to this IELTS Writing Task 2 essay type, with structure templates, useful vocabulary, and techniques to achieve Band 7+.
Originally published October 2017. Last reviewed 3 July 2026.
In this post, you will be able to view an essay example from a past student, with the corrections and feedback highlighted in red.
Most of the students studying for the IELTS Test have said they find the IELTS Writing Tasks difficult. I have corrected hundreds of task 1 and 2 essays on various topics, giving estimated band scores and detailed feedback. There are also suggestions on how to improve for a higher band score. Take a look at this student essay example and see how it compares to your own writing.
Writing Task 2 Question
“A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defence but spend less on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?”
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What Band 6 Means for Task 2
Band 6 in IELTS Writing Task 2 reflects adequate competence across the four assessment criteria. Understanding these criteria helps you identify exactly what to improve.
Task Response at Band 6
The response addresses the task, though some aspects may be more fully covered than others. Main ideas are relevant but may lack focus or supporting detail in places.
Coherence and Cohesion at Band 6
Information is arranged with some progression. Paragraphing is used but may not always be logical. Cohesive devices are present but may be mechanical.
How to Improve Beyond Band 6
- Plan before writing: Spend 5 minutes outlining your position, main ideas, and supporting points.
- Develop your ideas more: Each body paragraph should have a clear topic sentence, explanation, example, and link back to the question.
- Proofread: Reserve 2-3 minutes at the end to check for grammar errors, spelling mistakes, and unclear sentences.
- Practise under timed conditions: Write complete essays in 40 minutes to build speed and confidence.
Originally published on IELTS Achieve. Last reviewed 3 July 2026.
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